Ιmmaturity

Ιmmaturity

By Dark Daughter

One day you gonna regret for leaving me

One day I promise you will

Lonlyness made your life a misery

I didn't cause that

You did

Don't yell at me like it was my fault

Because it wasn't 

you screw it up

Oh my dear!

Don't begg me

Cause honey

I'm never coming back

You said that if I loved you

I would have given you a second chance

But darling think about that

"The cruel things that you told me

you can never take back"

Reviews

[Storm K.]

I thought this was a really good poem; it has nice sense of attitude, the tone is quite fierce, and I think that really helps give the effect of showing this other way of reacting to a break-up. I like how you've split up the stanzas as if our narrator is talking to someone else, and over all I think the message behind this poem is really good. I just have one question: is English your mother tongue? You make a few spelling and tense mistakes that would have me believe it is your second language.

[DarkDaughter]

Yeah.. My mother language is Greek ;// I'll check them.. by the way thanks for the review :)

[Just Kim]

powerful, emotional read.
Sorry you got treated this way.
You express yourself well

[Rob Santana]

Raw emotions, it's always good to express ourselves, to release.

[DarkDaughter]

(:

[khalid]

you have expressed the heart break in a very nice way here. i loved the challenge in your words although these words are making hints that love is still there..inspite of this love, you challenge not to return. most i loved was the last two lines, the cruel things you told me, you can never take back..this refers to the impossibilit in return since they can never take the cruel things away..

i really loved this nice poem..

[DarkDaughter]

Thanks! (:

[Angel]

This is a wonderfully worded poem and the emotions are very raw in every sentence, this poem makes me feel every pain that you have went through in this situation, I'm very sorry. :( I hope things get better for you, but this is an amazing poem! :)

[DarkDaughter]

thaks for the good reviews. :) I'm really grateful!