Eternal Loss

A feeling I had long ago, but when I think about it now it still lingers. And if my path doeth continue as I hope for it may bother me more.

I stand here on the border of

heaven and the mortal plain.

 

 

 

I stand in billowing white garments.

A single tear staining my flawless sienna skin.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I reach out a hand.

Hot, dry air touches my fingertips.

 

 

 

 

 

I stare at a bone dry, death ridden land.

You are not in sight.

 

 

 

I begged of you to follow me.

To stay by my side for eternity.

 

 

 

I stand here on the border of

heaven and the mortal plain.

 

 

 

 

Alone for E-T-E-R-N-I-T-Y

Reviews

[Twilight]

I was not sure about who or what the loss in this poem refers to, actually. Perhaps, this is something too personal for the writer to disclose? Either way, the concept of an "eternal" loss emphasies that this can never be replaced or compensated for. At least, not in a satisfactory manner?

I liked the references to "heaven" and mortality, by the way. It is rather a short poem, I believe. Then again, it's quite an emotional read! Quite a sad ending, in which the protagonist is left alone, and in need of love.....

[Arthur Crow]

Love the presentation of the emotionally charged and potent spill... flow and power!
Very well scribed with so much depth.. look forward to reading more of you.

[Lizanne]

A beautifully written piece. We each have our own interpretation of life and poetry. Without one you do not have the other. Maybe it is my mood tonight but it seems like a death pact on life or maybe love. A great loss.

[Jade_Phenomenal]

Very vividly conveyed....the pics helped tell the story. We all fear being alone from time to time.

Nice write!