Forever Dead

No matter how many times I see your face

It remains dead

No matter how many times I hear your name

It remains dead

No matter times I hear how great you were

It remains dead

I try so many times to bring it back to life

I fail, it remains dead

I want it to come back, I really do

It use to bring me joy everyday

But now it bring nothing but tears in my eyes everytime I see your smiling face

I use to be like you

But after you died

My smile has died along with you

You were my smile...Now its dead...It will forever remain dead...

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

The ending seemed to really surprised me, I wasn't expecting that. I was expecting this to kind of be one of those love poems where you are writing to an obsessed lover or something, know what I mean? Anyways, I couldn't imagine this in a better way, the concept is really nice, and I really enjoyed this poem. Keep it up.

[Pax]

deeply emotional and very sad..
true in some point...
your just as lifeless as the person who gives you life is now dead...

[just is]

Wonderful deep sad read, but nicely expressed.

[Katelyn]

Amazing poem! This was well written and heartbreaking. Great piece. Thank you for sharing. 100/100

[Chris]

Black and white in a grey world... forevers and nevers.
I feel the hurt.

[Lawrence Parlier]

I like it, but, I think you could dig in deeper and elaborate on this person, your connection to them, and your feelings. Watching them fade away as does your smile.

[BS Johnson]

Good work! I see alot of pain in your writing, specific pain. I think channeling that pain is what makes your pieces so good.

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Sometimes an emo poem transcends its genre, and I'm feeling it this time. Some people are so alive burning in our memory they are forever young to us, even if they once died. And it's beautiful and I thank you for this!

[~Princess~]

Great exspression on your words. I really hope you find eternal joy again my friend. Life without joy and happiness is very dull and you'll become bitter. I am sure you have gott it back or are getting it back. I loved your poem and it was really amazing. Keep up the good work and can't wait to review more. :) Perfect job my friend.

[jennifer little]

wonderufl work great job keep it up