Darkness

Sorry if it doesn't make any sense, it was something that popped in my head (:, I'll change it once I think of something else to put on this (:

What is this place??

Why can't I see a thing??

Is this hell??

Yes..its the darkness

Why am I here??

Because of what you have become..

I don't want to be here anymore..

I'm sorry, I really am

Someone, please save me from the darkness

Someone be my guardian angel

Save me!!

Author's Note

Review please, hope you like it (:

Reviews

[RetroVertigo]

There it is again....save me. This seems to be a recurring theme in your writing. Might I suggest that as much as you portray a soul that needs saving, you would be lost if you were saved. What then would you write about after all?? Embrace that pain:)

[Patrick Henry]

Becky, it would be awesome to play "hero" but just for a moment's time, for just like "RetroVertigo" eludes to...... if it happened, what would you write about? *Hugz* If I was your guardian angel, I'd probably get "fired".... Peter at the Gates style!! lol If that picture is indeed you, I may look silly wearing a smile 24/7 for what may seen as "for no specific reason". : ) This poem, answering your Author's not of it not making sense, is the very DEFINITION of what "save me" WOULD mean...... I had the song "Learning to Fly" by Pink Floyd in my head as I read this poem. Beautiful Becky. xoxo -Mark

Your name sounds like an author's name I would search out in a bookstore.

[no sun]

A pain filled peace but you did write hope into it. An excellent write!

[Suditi]

The emotion is raw and straightforward and that is the best thing about this poem.
A well written piece. :)

[just is]

Really enjoyed this write, is this a song?

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

So far so good, I might suggest a little more emotion in the darkness - as it seems a little too simple for me. But I enjoyed this write. Keep it up. Nicely done.