Panic

This room is dangerously quiet
As my mind begins it's cycle
I am completely alone tonight
I'm starting to feel suicidal

I can't fight it anymore
The pressure is just too strong
My weakened body collapses to the floor
I've been waiting to cry like this for so long

Rage makes my throat give in
With hands against my face I scream
I can't control what's coming from within
Tell me I am just in a violent dream

My breath is hoarse and rapid
Panicking from the memories and conversations
They eat me away like starved acid
I'm sorry I can't meet your expectations

Reviews

[yvo miki]

this is terrible thing for someone to make u feel like this...I love u

[Wórdsmíth]

Quiet painful. Some words are very strong plucked up from the hall of pain.

[Simon Welsh]

The world is a horrible place. You're such a good writer.

[Erana]

Going through life alone a challenge I would say.
We can cry alone, but happiness need to be shared.
To fight emotions like you do, you need to find someone to share,
Someone to help you cope with that pressure you dealing with.
~E

[lovelife]

Yea it's like u hold in all this pain and at some point u need to break I have felt this often and it can be very scary because all u want is to be a lone but for me being a lone people don't trust me to be alone for this exact reasso

[Dark Poet]

Exactly. Thank you:)

[lovelife]

your very welcome

[Hitchhiker]

Eh . . . I haven't read your reviews yet, but I imagine they are telling you, in their own way, that when we try to live up to other peoples expectations we usually feel we have fallen far short and this causes us to begin to believe we are worthless. It is a sad way to have to live and therefore causes thoughts of suicide. Only one last thing to say, work your way out of how you feel or try to find help.

[Namrata]

the poem tells us aloud, about your heart. But I don't mean to prune, why do you feel the need to apologize for who you are ? It's you, why others expectations are so important to you ?
I won't tell you , you are in a violent dream,
"you are escaping from a very possible beautiful reality, wake up ! "
It sounds rare, but it exists.

[Dark Poet]

It's okay.
I opologize to people because I hate myself and I feel like others feel the same way. I'm constantly making a huge fool of myself and being embarrased by who I am. i constantly feel like I am annoying people.
I hate not meeting peoples expectations because i want to make people happy and pleased.
Thank you for your comment:)

[Namrata]

Be yourself, hate those who don't accept your true entity.

[Dark Poet]

I'm getting better at it. Thanks

[MomzillaNC]

We all feel overwhelmed, desperate, and lost sometimes. And, we all feel like the world expects just too damn much. Sometimes, the only thing we can do is cry and scream it out.

Recommendation for the sake of meter: "The pressure is [just] to strong"
"With my hands against my face, I scream"
"I [can't] control what's coming from within"
"Panicking from memories and conversations"
I also recommend adding punctuation to this one, to better carry your points.

[Dark Poet]

Thanks i'll make those changes:)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I'm glad I could help.