Tempted Weakness

I'm giving all of my strength today
But love, my chest has this constant agony
I'm sorry, I wish I knew what to say
I hate this perfect tragedy

I want strong hands to hold me now
To keep me away from the weapon
I think I'll break my vow
He wants to teach me a lesson

I'm becoming who I used to be
And god, my heart is weakening
I'm trying to run and flee
But this hell is only deepening

I know opening flesh won't heal this
Except, I feel like I deserve it
I'll give death a soft kiss
I'm giving in I admit

Reviews

[SuspectGray]

"Perfect tragedy"...the struggle within yourself. Yup sometimes we all wish we weren't so "proper" and would love to just kick some butt. Writing it out should have the same effect. Keep writing for your poetry has the strong hands your are looking for.

[yvo miki]

no never give in baby girl ur beautiful and can do this im here for u

[Namrata]

I have nothing against the words you use or how you use them, but it's touching to see someone express themselves in this way, which is honest and heart crushing at the same time.
Though, glad I am to have you express it in words than anything else.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice use of words.
"I know opening flesh won't heal this
Except, I feel like I deserve it
I'll give death a soft kiss
I'm giving in I admit "
I liked the above lines. Tempting and alive in real life energy. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[1Disawsum]

Wow... still sounds strong, even though physically you feel weak. But no, giving in, admitting defeat, will not always be a bad thing. It can be good, to show you how much you can really handle, how you've been strong, for way too long.

"I hate this perfect tragedy" best line of the poem. Sums it all up, doesn't it?

Love this poem, very well done! Keep it up! xxx

[Dark Poet]

Thank you!

[Stephen]

It's good that you are expressing yourself. Does it make you feel better? I chose writing as my medium in which to express the things that way heavy on my heart. To release the pressure within so that I do not explode. What I find is that the more that I write the more I think about what was written, causing the pressure to get worse. Do you feel the same?? I liked this.

[Dark Poet]

It does make me feel better. And i know exactly what you are talking about.

[Justin]

that was really good, it has alot of emotion!!! sometimes going to that dark place helps people come out on a positive life :)