Waiting

Behind closed windows the sky was bruised
She felt too comfortable in the dark,
As she laid on a bed with her skin exposed
Thinking about a poem with roses

The feeling of missing someone had become painfully familiar
So she picked up a green pen
Hoping writing some words might make the lonliness wither
She still dug a fingernail across her arm again

Behind Blue Eyes was playing
She couldn't help singing along
Would she ever be as beautiful as a song?
She might never stop waiting

Author's Note

I began writing one thing and ended with another. It's about what I was doing and what the setting as I wrote, and what I was feeling/thinking as I wrote. And the song is by Limp Bizkit. Thanks for reading

Reviews

[-inactive now-]

(I know you wrote this ages ago, but I'm discovering your work for the first time now.)
I enjoyed that. Very poignant and delivered gracefully :)
Behind Blue Eyes is also a very lovely song and imagining it playing works really well here.
..though I'm more inclined to imagine the original version by the Who.
Nice work :)

[Dark Poet]

Thank you! And i havent written a poem lately so all of them are a bit older. I will have to listen to that version. I didnt know who the original was by. Thanks again:)

[Bohrium Guy]

Really inspiring and visual imagery shines well in this piece. Your choice for words..."The feeling of missing someone had become painfully familiar -So she picked up a green pen - Hoping writing some words might make the lonliness wither - She still dug a fingernail across her arm again" really stood out.

~Rob~

[Dark Poet]

Thank you! I enjoyed your review

[Jaspar]

Beautiful. I know that lonely feeling. Missing someone who meant the world to you and then they're just gone. It's hard to deal with. Keep up the writing.

[MAC]

oh, so love when that happens....start with an idea and when it is done you do not recognize it. a strong write laced in sadness. excellent!

[Dark Poet]

Thank you so much! And i agree

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Made the reader felt like they were peeking into secret thoughts and places. The thoughts alone in the night. Can leave us dreaming, hoping and wishing to be elsewhere. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dark Poet]

Thank you for your kind reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[sapna sagar]

this is a awesome piece....

[Dark Poet]

Thank you:)

[Emily]

Vary well put together!
Keep it up!

[Basu Gupta]

Expressed the longing well..
good attempt thanks for sharing

[BLACKCRUSH]

I love this, beautiful piece.