Just Another Alice

Pardon my crappy poem- I attempted to ryhme

My world's spinning around
As I'm tumbling down
Reality sinks in quicksand
And I find myself in Wonderland
My mind is unwound
And I scream without sound
Alone I now stand
Lost in a dreamland
Running I hit the ground
As my world's crashing down
I'm without hope again
Stuck again in Wonderland

Reviews

[zainul]

You expressed your situation very clearly.
I hope everyone may relate to this piece even she/he may be older than Alice in real life.

[J.Carnevale]

wonderful! i love this! it rhymes really well and it flows nicely.

[cfix]

I really enjoyed this write. Wonderful flow and rhyme scheme.

[Antonio Valentino]

Never a need for apologies here, we're all forever students yes?
Its not easy feeling lost, believe me I know.
I used to only write rhyme, now, not so much.
This could be easily turned into a very nice melodic piece,
you just have to get out the chisel, and hack away at it a little here and there.

Thanks for sharing this with us Shley!
Antonio