Eye on the Ball

Nursery Rhymes Series : IV

The brother bounced the ball

Mentally focusing on the hoop

Then he raised the ball and threw

It missed and bounced off the panel.

He next walked with the ball slowly

Taking his time to practice control

It is about not losing the ball

But its also about how you toss it away.

He ran back to the basket and tossed

It missed and bounced back further

He ran after it but too late

He had lost the ball and perhaps more.

He picked it up from the lawn

And walked back to the driveway

' Nobody knows the real deal,' he said

Then realized it included him.

Figured he'll try free shots this time

And chose the spot for the throws

Perhaps best out of five, he thought

That might say something … about luck.

He managed one out of five … it sucked

He wanted to store the ball away and run

But something stopped him very gently

He paused, then figured he'll practice control.

The basket was over the garage door

The time was coming to be about 5.00

His father would be back in a while

He bounced the ball but kept it close.

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

I love the way you use basketball is a metaphoric fashion. The poem speaks volumes about life's many pondering's. Thank you for sharing.

[Cory Barrett]

I go back to read this piece over and over again, and always wonder... what is the ball, are we the reader, or the shooter. Will he/we ever get better at this game? Are we destined to miss everything, no matter how much we try? Is every day a real game, or is it all really just practice? Lovely piece here.

[Dayran]

I wrote the poem with the issue of inquiries in mind. Sometimes we manage inquiries to reflect in some way the answers. Its the basis of relations ... social contact ... and making the necessary achievement. To hear ourselves think ...is sometimes a revealing experience. Thks for the review.

[John Anderson]

very impressive work here...excellent piece...good, strong writing!

[Judas Hammer]

unique. I wish I could give a review close to the quality of your own. All I can say is motivation and descriptive. I enjoyed this

[Leigh]

Your style of writing seems to be able to create interest in almost any subject matter.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A classic feel to this piece that negates the journey of the story, well done, good read.

[CH Archive]

Wow, I havent read a poem from you in forever! You're a master at both poetry and short stories! Great write, its different, which, as you know, I love.