Murderer

Rays of light,

Flickering,

Coming and going as they please,

Wearied, glancing over into nothingness,

Pitch black,

They have come to receive me,

Take me away,

To punish me,

To pull me down, to the depths of despair,

I tightly grip, wanting life,

I shall not surrender to their evil,

They will not taint me with their blood,

Red, crimson blood, stained,

Everywhere I look,

Reflected in my eyes,

I fear most, that light,

Which chases after me,

I am alone,

Helpless and afraid,

With unforgotten memories of death,

My hands... painted red,

Raw and fresh,

What... have I done?

Lives lost,

By these bloodied hands...

These poor, unfortunate souls.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Just a poem I had written today :)

Reviews

[ImSJ]

Summer, I feel myself wanting to know the story being told here. But the verse obscures the meaning. What or who are the lights? Receiving the speaker or chasing? More work is needed to clarify this piece. I hope you won't give up on it.

I have to say that this speaker as a werewolf!

[Ti]

The concept which I was trying to create here, was mainly about a man, seing himself as a monster and felt extremely guilty about murdering many people, but is unable to control his blood-thirst, since he only just turned into a vampire, and is endlessly hiding from the villagers in the town whom are hunting him down. Just tried to write a horrow poem really..... :)
Thank you very much for you review ImSJ.

[ImSJ]

I am not much in favor of romanticizing or sympathizing with the Undead. Inevitably, they will turn on you. Given the means and opportunity I'd give them the full Winchester treatment. No worries!

[Ti]

Hahaha, yes that is true, in the end monsters are monsters (even though their not real) and the undead, are the undead. Once again thank you :)

[Jackson H. Harley]

Love this, a dark masterpiece, awesome work :D

[Ti]

Thank you very much Jackson for a kind review :D

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It has a very Poeish feel to it and reads like a nightmare rather than reality. Lots of the red stuff in it Summer.

[Ti]

Thank you for your review John, :)