Jack and Jill (Twisted Nursery Rhyme)

Jack and Jill went up the hill

With a bottle of rum and time to kill

They told Jack's mom they were fetching a pail

Therefore that's become the common tale

Jack fell down and lost his crown

For when one drinks they become quite a clown

And swaying around, Jill fell too

And they both blacked out, as drunk teenagers do.

Reviews

[FREE_BIRD]

nice memories of chilhood gone and new era started by your poem published....for a little while i accept the reality of this world and be the same all the time

[ANTO]

A similar rhyme was doing the rounds on cheeky Valentines cards when I was a teen;
Jack and Jill went up the hill
to fetch a pail of water
Poor old Jill forgot her pill
And a baby came nine months after.

The second stanza cracked me up. Great twisting Shadow. xD

[Death's Poet]

Being twisted is one of my best qualities ;D hahahaha thank you so much ANTO

[ANTO]

I bet you didnt write that in your University application lol. joking here . always great to read you Shadow ... ;)

[PonoEllis]

Creative and interesting indeed

[Abilash Uttama]

a creative perspective, good work !