free at last

love is so hard to express

A tiny fleshy lock,
for a fleshy little cell,
the criminal in hold,
deserve not the cell,
inside a huge fleshy system.
So as rain fell on the system,
as it made intent hurried steps,
as those tear drops fell,
immersion outrolled in the cold,
and so cold behold and more unfold,
but out of the dark in more cold,
a little cold in coat approach,
to offer some warmth in another immersion,
so locked in embrace,
as rain and tears fades,
emotion gushes and so behold,
the fleshy lock fleshy key,
unfolds to free the criminal,
so out of the little out let,
of the huge fleshy system,
being free at last,
the criminal rushes out,
as; 'i love you'.

Reviews

[Ruth]

Wow! This is excitingly written! Really potent imagery and what a piece! This is awesome love, conjurs so many thoughts, superb wording xoxo

[An owl on the moon]

Your words dance brilliant as metaphors and deep inside the heart and mind. What a release to trace your steps through the thoughts and find a powerful deliverance!

[A]

This is a unique description of feelings conflict, portraying I love you as a prisoner struggling to get out, very smart,
I truly enjoyed this my friend, you are an innovative writer, keep it up.