I'll love you when...

 

 

 

 

 

I'll love you
as the wind blows
you far away from me

And as your eyes
look wearily
At graceful,
waving seas

I'll love you
as the branches sway
and dance along the shore
Then when you sigh
and let me go
I'll lay down
forever more

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Brittany W]

Beautifully written, it has a great flow to it, simply fantastic.

[Miss Coral]

Hauntingly beautiful piece right here- love the last line and the simplicity of the statements.
Great write.

-Coral-

[loowzerX]

lovely.

[skye]

reminds me of a poe...love it :D

[Pax Analog]

A wispy melancholy freedom wafts through these lines.

Also the quiet wisdom of receiving by letting go.

Love as mysterious acceptance of what is.

[Aimee Mahathy]

I actually like this. XD I'd recommend changing the title though. >.> I almost didn't read it because I figured it was going to be all self-pitying "you're horrible" type of poem. Which it is totally not! I really loved it! The images it provoked were beautiful. The only thing missing was an acoustic guitar.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I love this. Very good flow and emotion is clear though underlying nice!

[Dream Weaver]

Dedication Desire and depth..
Short but on target..nicely done.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

this is embraced love in the woods with branches fluttering

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

has al almost disassemled fairy tle quality about it~ a soft sigh of a poem~