Help Me...

Help me is about the innocents that end up dying in the wars.

I crouch, 

barefoot and crying 

on the forest floor. 

These people are vicious 

with their metal guns 

and green uniforms... 

soldiers. 

Help Me. 

I have a family, 

two daughters and a son. 

My wife is gone, 

Taken by these men. 

Help me. 

One man points the metal gun 

towards me. He laughs. 

Speaking in another language... 

One i cannot understand. 

Help me. 

Smirking, he says something else. 

Then, he pulls the trigger. 

Hel-

Reviews

[Michael of Gilead]

it has always seemed odd to me, in certain circumstances, how innocent civilians choose to ignore the armed men that hide among them...don't they know what will happen?

some suggestions
I would edit out the word metal, replace it in one place with weapon perhaps?
and soldiers, it's not needed, green uniforms tells us....
another language, i would change that to foriegn tongue?

[STAR CHILD]

i agree wow powerful write it is a tragedy making me feel sad and the humans seem be cruel

[deeps]

Wow powerful write here,
Nicely written.