the shade of pale-

 

 

Forlorn- and watch your tongue.
No where near bleak, no where near your too assumed...
No where near my dear.

The shade of pale painted and my tears your watercolor

Go paint your pretty picture
on your narcissistic cynicism...

on your canvas of obscure-

Your not that way,
but then again....

They wear you like their cheap cologne...
and you, you dip in the dime of the dozen

dirty words that are dirty mean
it's the thought that turns one ill

the remembered, forgotten
and left for getting...

what you find may never be real-

Reviews

interesting form. Good use of words. Well expressed emotion.

This is a good piece.

reminded me to review the song lyrics "Whiter Shade of Pale" by annie lennox

[L.G. Knight]

Wonderfully erratic and unstructured but still easy to read and comprehend... your writing is like an exact opposite of mine and I think from looking at this you might be someone I could learn alot from... really well done!

~Frances~

[M_S_Lay]

Powerful and sad. Well done

[J. James Reider]

I like your use of some complicated words... alot of times it is hard to find a place in a piece for words with such a powerful meaning... this is also a really good piece for lack of a pattern, it is still very readable but no where near predictable... Terrific job!