Thoughts

This is from last year. I still like it, surprisingly enough. It was published in my school's literary art journal.

Thoughts
(A Sestina)

Conflicting thoughts make it hard to think,
And yet, I can still feel
that one day I will possibly see
in clarity. And maybe one day I will know
if it is possible to grow
into the person I must become.

You may never become
what you imagine, but if you think
that you can, you will grow. 
How do you feel 
knowing that what you know
is not what you really see?

See,
if I become
something I do not know,
will I still think
the way I feel? 
Will I ever grow?

How does one grow?
Is it because of what we see? 
What we feel?
What dictates what we become?
I don’t think
that anyone will ever truly know.

If there is anyone who does know, 
please, tell me how your thoughts grow.
Although, I believe if we all think,
we are sure to see
we all have different results. Two people never share who they become
or how they feel.

In my confusion, I feel
that I will never know
who I will become
until it is what I became. I will only grow
when I see
that I cannot always correctly think.

I will continue to feel that what I think
is what I see, but I will continue to know
that, in order to grow, I must give up and let myself become something undiscovered. 

Reviews

[xxsilentrainxx]

I really like this! I like how you used stream of conscience to eventually come to a point of understanding. I think you could possible use more rhetorical devices along with some imagery to maybe show your point better instead of just telling. I only say this because I'm a visual person and I think and learn better with something that I can actually see and because of that I became a little lost towards the middle. That being said, I think you have a great idea here and I really liked it! Great job! =)

[Invisible]

yes indeedy.

[K-mo]

there is a lot of insight in this poem! wonderful work!!!

[N.Sevilla]

Wonderful. I enjoyed it very much.