Forever Gone

Short Story i wrote in english class lol

They were the only two left. The entire army was wioed out by the enemy. She had suffered only a wound, but his armor kept him safe. Knowing if they don't find help she will soon die, he begins calling for help. Screaming as loud as he can. It did no good. Then he turned around. He saw a castle. He told her to wait and went on his way. He walked into the castle but never left. She cried for him until she was gone. To this day, her weaps and his cries for help can still be heard. But no longer is it real. It is just a memorie...

Reviews

[Luna]

That's really good. It portrays perfectly that love never dies with a chilling after affect. Great job!

[Mimi]

I loved it. It is so short and chilling. I like how you have written this piece. Nice job.

[Kate Green]

wow thats cute :)

[Satellite Heart]

I loved it. It makes you wanna cry.

[Manyfacets]

In all honesty I think you should do a little work on this story. Corrections in spelling would be a place to start and there is a pronoun problem throughout the piece. As a reader I couldn't understand any of it.
Hope this helps...Smiles M.

[ZmH]

i like ur story! =p
luv z