The Lecter in me

 You walk hand in hand with your new man

    I just stand there and stare

 You both laugh at me and tease

    You'll be in your own Silence of the Lambs

In my head your Claurice and I'm Lecter

  Your the detective and I'm the maniac

I'm trapped in this cell in my mind

  But I guess you have him to be your protector

  The anger brews inside me but I stay calm

My eyes focus on his neck, and I'm about to lunge

  But we all know I'm not Insane, or am I

My head feels like a Ticking Time bomb

You finally walk by and look into my eyes

  A part of you knows you made a mistake

But you would never admit it

  You made your last mistake when you said your goodbyes 

Author's Note

Here's to you, you back stabbing witch! Hope he makes you happy!

Reviews

[Margo Seuss]

Funny you should write this. I just recently saw the movie! Hannibal Lecter is truly a bizarre guy. His countenance is sauve and gentle but his actions dictate otherwise!!

It would seem this piece was an outlet for your emotions; I shall spare you the technical ryhme speech. I am glad you use poetry as a way of dealing with them. Colourful words on paper are safer and much more interesting to read! You express yourself well, and for that I commend you.

I have a challenge for you!!! Try writing a poem ( when you're not too emotional) and experiment with flow and ryhme. My suggestion would be the limerick!! They're great fun! In the limirick, the first and last lines ryhme and the middle two lines ryhme. You can make stanza after stanza. But the challenge is to make them flow! When you read them you want the words to flow off of your tongue in an almost song like fashion. No odd pauses. Personally, I'm a strict ryhmer! For the most part, I only ryhme words in the same tense with ( for the most part) similar spelling. Like 'ham' and 'ram' instead of 'ham' and 'can.' I also won't ryhme a pluralized word with a singular word. If the poem is unique enough to get away with ryhme errors, than that's a okay! Otherwise, ryhme and syllabols are crucial! Give my challenge a try if you want! I'm curious to see what you will come up with!

Margo Seuss
Courtesy of the Constructive Critisism Group

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much Margo for the advice, I'll think about taking it :) I'm glad you liked it. And Lecter is my all time favorite movie villain, but you can't really call him a villain, he helps with the case. But yet he is the villain because he eats his victims. His voice brings a shiver to anyones spine ^*^

[Archia]

I haven't seen Silence of the Lambs so I only kind of know about it but it didn't bother me when reading this. I thought that it worked well anyway and it was still a powerful poem and I enjoyed reading it.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much ^*^ I'm glad you liked it

[melissa]

This is amazing poem keep up the great work and keep them coming

[Kiara]

The Silence of the Lambs is one of my favorite movies! Have you seen Red Dragon and Hannibal too? Also, I don't want to be harsh or anything because I see it a lot but you're is supposed to be used for you are and your is supposed to show ownership. I really like this, I wish I could write something about my ex saying how I feel but I just can't fit all of the words and mixed feelings into a certain space. Great job with this... :)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

I have seen red dragon and Hannibal :D it is totally ok, I understand :) My favorite part from Hannibal has to be when Lecter is behind the detective with the cloroform, and he's like "You know.... I'm giving thought in eating your wife." Then he winks, I was ike OH MY GOD!! lmao. But anyways, so glad you liked it ^*^

[Kiara]

Hahaha I need to rewatch those movies, it's been too long :) Now I have something to fill my procrastination time besides Supernatural so thank you haha :)

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

lol :) No problem, Hannibal is actually on Netflix :) if you wanna watch it. I was actually named after anthony hopkins XD fits with my personality lmao

[Kiara]

That's probably the coolest thing ever. I wish I was named after someone that awesome but my parents are pretty lame :p And my internet is being slow so I'll just use my dvd :) But thank you

[Ranger Nadaly]

When I read the first stanza I wasn't enthused but by the second stanza I was stuck. I started to understand the poem's overall idea and I fell for the narrator. Great poem.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you so much :) I appreciate the honesty :) I'm glad you liked it

[Ranger Nadaly]

I should be the one thanking you for publishing your work. Otherwise I wouldn't have been able to enjoy this piece.

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

:) feel free anytime to read more of my work, I love getting feedback.

[Bowers]

This is deeply emotional... to think many of us have been in these shoes, you've done a great on with this write. Very thought provoking!

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

Thank you very much :) I'm glad you liked it

[Bowers]

You are very welcome!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Ouch what a poem, she must have really hurt you. It's unfair to be treated like crap, just for being a genuine person. She will get hers, I believe karma will come and maybe she might wake up to herself. Nobody deserve's to be treated the way you were Jokerboy16.

Kaze~

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

I'm glad you understand :") It hurts so bad when they mock you especially. Like I said in the poem, she made her last mistake when she said her goodbyes.

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Just hang in there, if you show that it's not getting to you. They will get board with you, because they aren't getting the reaction they want. I know it's difficult. :-(

[daemok]

she hurt you pretty badly eh? just remember that all this come around go around. -.o

[Oswald Chesterfield Cobblepot]

She did hurt me bad, but after writing this, I feel like I have finally gotten back at her.