Reborn house

Just felt to write it after coming back home :)

Summer holiday's

end: 'house reborn like our feel-

ing of belonging.

Author's Note

ok, so in order to keep on the 5-7-5 syllable scheme I had to do two things I hated to do:
1) cut the "The" at " 'house " in the second verse
2) split the word "feeling" (first half in the second verse, second half in the third one)
so ... love or hate it (honesty !) ?

Reviews

[MandaBear]

Interesting as always. Great job

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

It speaks a lot. And I know what you mean by your author's note sometimes, things bug us when we have to write a certain way, I know it bugs me sometimes. Good write.

[quinfinn]

made perfect sense to me and delivered the intention with pin point accuracy....
what's not to like?

[外人 (Gaijin)]

feel-ing split xD Hated to do that

[quinfinn]

it's fine...roll ...with it, or......improve it....you have plenty of talent

[外人 (Gaijin)]

Thanks =D

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of words. A complete poem with meaning in so few words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

I like it! It's difficult sometimes to fit everything you want to express into a haiku, but it seems as though you've succeeded!

[Leslie Philibert]

Good work - compressed wisdom !

[MOON]

Lovely Concise

[Ahmad Cox]

Yeah it really is good. I love haikus. I will have to add some of mine

[axel]

well its nice

[Krista Weiss]

Really good! It's like weird to read it out loud but it's still cute :) haha