Blood Carnival

A poem about a carnival that's not what it seems.

Carnival, carnival

I welcome, and chuckle

You to fest-ivities

With playgrounds, and candies

 

Come to me, and my home,

Come to me, free to roam,

Come to me, curious eyes,

Come to me, I’ve no lies

 

Spinning mer-ry go round,

Dancing lights, crack and sound

Cotton can-dy is fed

They wear stripes, white and red

 

Singing and

Dancing and

Playing and

Sheer obliv-iousness.

 

Close the gates, lock it all

Leave them be-hind the wall

Pink cotton, flecked with red

Of children, left for dead

 

My fingers, snatch children,

Pull them in, to my den

Can’t escape, my brutal

Humble Blood, Carnival

Author's Note

I did this for a poetry contest, and I have to turn this in by tomorrow. My friend's mom told me it was too creepy. o3o'

But...it's supposed to be creepy! ;3;

Anywho, any suggestions for improvement?

Reviews

[The XYZ Writer]

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Quite creepy. And since that's what you were going for, this is perfectly done! Remind me never to go to this guy's carnival.

Finally a piece from you, so that I can reward again with a 100!

Creepy job well done m'dear.

[Summer'sBreeze]

Wow.

Just. Wow.

Pshhh! Nothing can be too creepy. XD

You did an awesome job
I had a shiver run down my spine at the last stanza.

Amazing job well done, Dragon! :D
Lots of luck in the contest!

[Summer'sBreeze]

Btw, where can I buy a couple of tickets?

This is just the place Jazz and I would go XD

[Dark Rider]

This is great! I loved it. I hope you win the contest. :)