Lonely World

the lonely world keeps spinning on

the clocks have long since stopped ticking

grey but cloudless sky

black but unburnt land

a sole wanderer in an eternity of night

all remaining life vanished from it’s face

Reviews

[Sydney]

Again very nice rhythm, keep it up!

[Daisygirl]

Thank you for your kind compliment.

[ANTO]

This is our future if we don't amend our attitude and behaviours. It may be the present on a million Earth-like planets already in the Universe. It has powerful apocalyptic undertones. No clouds means no weather, no atmosphere even, and no Life. Many people and relationships though alive outwardly are just as dead inside and just as lonely.
A powerful and thought-prodding poem.

[Daisygirl]

I hadn't thought of the other planets that could be out there like that, now I have something new to think about! Thanks.

[AaronFreitas]

Damn great detail in this write... good job!

[Daisygirl]

Thanks so much!

[Lizardo]

Wow, this describes what would happen if our human race came to an end.
Interesting thoughts you have here.
Enjoyable and great piece of writing!

[Daisygirl]

Thanks, that's what i was going for.

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!