Noise of the Demon (version 1)

This is a song I wrote a couple years ago

Don't let this noise confuse you, dear
Or it just might take control.
Never will you let the demon find you here
Don't ever let him in your soul.

He will eat you.
He will rape your existence.
You will never live through it.
You will never live through it.
He will only lay waste to you!

If you fight him he will only hurt you.
Don't let him get inside.
Don't let his noise confuse you.
You've got to let him lose you!

He will eat you.
He will rape your thoughts.
You will never live to tell your story.
You will never regain your soul.
You will only die again and again,
If you let the noise take control.

Author's Note

JG, 2008

Reviews

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I cannot imagine this song playing to a very primitive beat.......well done

[White Ink]

Good one, but It would be better without repeating "You will never live through it" 3 times.. play with your words and rhymes a bit.. oh n the image is catchy haha it's what attracted me to read this!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

That Demon gets everywhere.

[HB]

Don't particularly care for the second verse. Starts out really powerful, and peters out. I think it's partially the lack of rhyme (breaking the poem's pattern).

Ah, a thought: Try switching the second verse with the last and see how that reads...

[Cerebriation]

Emily, think about it as a Tool song. That's what I had in my head at the time!

[Emily]

OK,the only thing I don't like is the repeat of 'You will never live through it' Other than that, good!

[Cerebriation]

The demon has many, many faces.

[Lily Mae]

I actually dated him..strange how not many red flags came up lol.. :) Great write..xx