Run On Sentences

My mouth has a way of saying nothing and everything all at once.

And suddenly:

I can’t feel anything but dread and there are shards of glass in my mouth where teeth should be and a sinking heart in a place that used to beat with so much life and I know it is nothing but I feel like the world is going to shatter and I am going to laugh in the midst of it all as I tell myself: one more day, only one more day will I allow myself to feel this way.

Reviews

[Jeremy Hiles]

Great job! I could visualize everything in the poem and feel the emotion packed into it! Keep up the great work!

[Coyote Poetry]

You create places and situation. I could feel the human condition and the want to escape what is coming. I liked how you used the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lauren]

sorry about the Late reply, but thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[natasha rawls aka "simo..]

Wow...pretty deep.
"...shards of glass in my mouth where teeth should be" makes me want to probe more into what might have just happened...
I like it:)

[Lauren]

Thank you so much!

[Falling Cherry]

hey there! great job! i love your choice of words and the way you are able to convey the message. Right, tomorrow, you should start anew! :-)

[Lauren]

Thank you very much!

[J Johnson III]

The whole, "I will start tomorrow" thing. Nicely done. Good job.

[Lauren]

Thank you :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Oh wow, this is an amazing piece. You can really feel what the character is feeling. Brilliantly well described. :-)

Kaze~

[Lauren]

Thank you!! xxx :)

[Cameron Griffith]

I'm speechless...beautifully done - wow! Great use of imagery in this, from the shards of glass as teeth. Hard to find a lot of poems that give so much imagery as you did. I applaud you, near perfect poem, loved it! Is this continuing from something?

[Lauren]

Thank you!
And no, I was actually just awake by myself at like 3 am at my friend's house one night, and it just randomly popped into my head and I typed it up on my phone. :)

[Cameron Griffith]

Now you know when to write your next one ;) Ha, but really good!

[Justin]

that was great!!! as a reader i can feel what the character is going through :) great job :)

[Lauren]

Thanks so much :)

[Justin]

your welcome, keep it up :)