Laced with Gold

What do we treasure?

I offered you my soul

the worth of it

did seem small at the time,

you verified the pawn shops bid

so, I did not even bother with the exchange…

 

She offered me her words

I treasured them

beyond measure,

diamond clarity

dazzled every line,

I was not worthy of such a gift.

 

I spent years refining my heart,

a pirates’ ransom

laced within,

woven golden threads

prove my mettle,

now, too weighty for you to bear…

Reviews

[Kirsty Woodward]

I question sometimes whether love can ever be equal. "I spent years refining my heart", deep and beautiful to read. I will come back to this one again.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comment. I need to work on this write a little... It does get the emotion on paper however.

[...]

When love is taken for granted and left to feel unappreciated, something in it dies, and your idea of what you thought this person was, crashes. I have chosen to remain acquaintance with some, but we aren't close anymore, we aren't friends.

[David Scott]

I guess we have all had times in our lives when we needed to claim our value and realize rejection is not about our worth as much as being about the blindness of those who fail to see our true soul...
Thank you for commenting and for understanding the place I was writing from.
You are a good friend.

[Alisa Js]

Aloha,

I wonder why it is that certain ones don't appreciate the obvious? Could it be that they were never meant to be in the first place???

If that's the case, then it all works out at the end of the day....

Isn't is far better to be with one who loves and appreciates you for who you are?

Lovely poem... thanks for sharing...

Alisa ;-)

[David Scott]

Thank you for reading this oldie... I need to work on the format here, but the words are right for the emotion. I give love big... This was written when my love was called into question. Oddly this was not a romantic relationship on my part. I love my friends deeply and openly. So it hurts when it is taken for granted. I have learned to accept how others express their love better now as well. :) Letting go of attachments without letting go of my love.

[Alisa Js]

I can certainly relate....and I think this explains why your poetry resonates with me.

Thank you again for sharing your talent with us, out here.

Alisa💫

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Always a lovely read from you Scott. The gift of one's soul is perhaps the most priceless gift of all. Much more so than even the heart, for the heart can be fickle and bitter at times, producing such strife within...but the soul, is our essence... it is everything we are and love combined into a beautiful conglomeration of us. Truly wonderful poem, leaving me in a cloud of thought and emotion. fantastic.

[David Scott]

Thank you for spending you convalescence with my poetry today. I hope it ceased you pain in dome small way. You are kind and insightful dear friend.
Get better soon!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Aw, thanks Scott, you know your poetry always soothes the soul here. my pleasure as always.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

There is nothing more precious than your soul....you have a selfless one that I find endearing...
never have you taken back your gift... Such a giver you are, and Golden!!

The "weight" of your burdens have a way of balancing out in the end...
I know for a fact that your soul is priceless.... worth more than Gold! xx

Excellent!...well penned, sweet Unicorn!~xoxo~:)

[David Scott]

Ahhh...
You melt me...
Thank you very much Robbie.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's my pleasure... and I feel the same... melting... xx :)

[Tam Warink]

Layers of words cannot occlude what was meant to be revealed. Attraction, repulsion... goal-seeking revulsion; all of this and more are in the deck from which our cards are dealt. As this makes perfectly clear that treasure is a word of many meanings. What we value in life reveals much about our values and our worth to others and to the world in which we exist. If they have mass then weight is implicit when other bodies come near. Let's hope the orbits are elliptical or perhaps a near miss. Collisions should be avoided if at all possible.

100 golden threads

[David Scott]

You are generous with your golden threads of thought and wisdom...
Thank you for the elaboration on the theme. I can tell you have the poem honest attention.
Collision are magnificent however tragic. Ha.

[TrimarcoRansome]

We all seek our grail, if we only cared to look down we often find the X beneath our feet!! Sometimes we do not see what we have for searching so hard and lose it before we realise how precious is was. We mostly treasure the wrong things, that human nature huh?

[David Scott]

I like your thoughts. Not really the same track I was thinking of on the grail when I wrote this, but I can see how you could go this direction.
It was very much about what we treasure though. Also about growing and learning what to value most...

[David Scott]

Oh.... oooops. I do want to thank you for the review and read.

[s y e]

I think we treasure a lot in our lives, don't you? Your title had me hooked before I even began to read your wonderful poem. You cannot put a price on love, that's for sure.

Everything in a relationship is special, the kind words, the intimate side of things even the cutesy, cheesy part, too. Ha.

I loved this.

[David Scott]

Well, your a treasure dear Noodles. Thank you for your kind words today. You have given me a smile.

[s y e]

Glad to make someone smile.

[KatDarkness]

The title grabbed my attention immediately, I love it. My favourite line is "Diamond clarity dazzled every line" very beautiful.

[David Scott]

Thank you for your thoughts and for stopping by. It is good to hear from you again. :)