Enlightened

Just a thought or inspiration.

Enlightened

How darkly
doth thy pen enlighten,
pon this soul ink stained ~
white on night.

Whence comes
delight of painless bleeding,
bliss bathes a thick abyss ~
sealed wax upon cold kiss.

Transparent quest
earned knowing levitates,
weighted words now lifting ~
consciousness to flight.

Author's Note

IDK... Tell me what you think or better yet, feel.

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

I feel I like this BUT not sure I understand it! I had better read it again.

[David Scott]

That is funny considering the topic... Honestly, I have experienced the concept of enlightenment being vague and being clearly defined. To me, it is an experience along a continuum of both understanding while feeling, arriving while continuing to seek...
I am happy you "like" it however. It is a start. :)

[jesserose99]

I feel schooled David...my goodness. You have such incredible depth and so few words. You have crafted beautifully. Crying Kate helped me to see even more depth, but on my own, I just found myself taken away by the words. It flowed so smoothly I read it over and over, not just because it flowed but because the words meant something to me...'weighted words now lifting', what was once heavy on the mind, disappears, and allows one to rise. i hope i haven't misinterpreted anything...nonetheless, thank you sooo much for sharing!!

[David Scott]

Thank you for such kind words. Yes, those lines meant much the same to me. However, I doubt I can "school" anyone. Share, yes. Search and illuminate. Refine the heart song to transparency.
So happy you enjoyed it. 😀

[jesserose99]

maybe it was just what i needed to hear at the right time...i love that poetry can do that. So thanks again. :)

[David Scott]

I'm so glad. The Spirit leads...

[Cryingkate]

I liked it David.. Although I read the comments after I read it two or three times. I was glad to see I did indeed catch it. I thought perhaps I might not of caught it all because of the line "sealed wax upon cold kiss"
But yes even that afterwards was all fitting.
When we write, we are able to examine everything with a third eye and we can more clearly see.
Here the View is from a healing perspective as we look upon old past hurts/pain and see how silly it was.
Here in the healing of expression with words we see how dark things (un-necessarily things) were from the perspective of a cold dark abyss of negative dark thoughts, but now the written words=sealed wax like unto (a sealed wax finished letter) transmutes the dark thoughts into freedom from oppression and into a new flight of light/joy/happiness
I love the thoughts here and love how with little words, you spoke much truth.
Your really a joy to read David and Your communication of transformation is a treasure for others to lean on.
You were meant to write it David. Meant to share, meant to guide others from the dark and into the light.

[David Scott]

Dear Kate, you have touched me with your comment. Sometimes I do feel a calling to write, but I feel extremely inadequate. If even one person is blessed it was worth the risk...
Thank from the depths of my heart for you review.

[Cryingkate]

Ok David, I'm eating "joy- tears" for a late breakfast.
Now I know I was spot on. Last night when I reviewed this something told me I needed to tell you that.
I had a V-8 moment and wondered why i never saw it before.
I just looked at you as a very good writer
But something told me You gotta let him know.
Know what?
It took me a long time to learn this but since I found out.. It works like a Cross and Holy water to a Vampire :-) That is this.......
Whenever you hear the words "I ain't" or "your not"... Well know that that's "the Lie" that's the accuser....
The real truth is that 'I Am" " You Are the I Am"
The I Ain't belief is the Bondage that we were deceptively taught to believe.
Just Keep Writing David...That I Ain't can't stand the light of what you have to say!

[Lydia Shutter]

Brought me back to reading "Canterbury Tales"! I think it is about someone dying....getting cold and then feeling nothing and flying off to a netherworld. Sort of eerie....but certainly unique, David. Lydi**

[David Scott]

Well, I like your take on it... I was not going there with it, but I can see how one could. Just talking about the power of poetry...
Thank you for stopping in Lydi.
Have a blessed day! :)

[fierceauthor]

I'm very interested to know what it's about..but it was very good

[David Scott]

I'm sorry... I guess I should have explained it... I seldom do.
This was about how poetry may feel heavy and dark, but it enlightens those who read and compose it. This is about the complexity of our poetic expression while embracing the simplicity of being transparent.
The inoscence of a kiss with the inevitability of death turning it cold...
So on and so on... And more.
What it means to you however is the only thing important to your experience.
I'm sorry if I was overly cryptic. It was not my intention.
The "IDK" was more of an expression of feeling a bit of overwhelm at the inspiration.
Thank you for reading.

[Jennesis]

I really like that line "soul ink stained" It is true how the words that come from within us are pieces of ourselves released to paper. I know for me, that I do feel later when they come out....

[David Scott]

Funny, I just edited that very line ailment before you reviewed it...
I'm glad something resonated with you.

[Alisa Js]

Nice worded...bring to mind Shakespeare...

Alisa😃

[David Scott]

Thank you island child. 😉. You are kind with your reviews.

[Bohrium Guy]

I really like the old school wording and the imagery the write produced. Very thoughtfully crafted and I really liked the lines "Whence comes
delight of painless bleeding,
bliss bathes a thick abyss ~
sealed wax upon cold kiss. " Its powerful! Thanks for sharing this piece. Keep up the good work!

~Rob~

[David Scott]

Thank you very kindly Rob. Had to throw in a little rhym...