There was a time...

…there was a time when these hearts raced

sweet love was claimed in warm embrace

 

harsh pain was not a part of life

before fate’s hand unsheathed her knife

 

today the tears are dusty trails

streaked shades of dreams and childish tales

 

dry eyes burn red, they cannot see

a world where there’s no you with me…

 

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Wow! Simply, extraordinary and engaging poem there. Four excellent, well-written couplets which express every emotion and every occurrence vividly and profoundly. Just superb. Keep writing.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comment and for reading Vatsal.

[ms. barrie]

very moving write, that paints portraits of twilight's reminiscing/reflecting
with a subtle streak of whimsy. captured with eloquence.
thank you for sharing :)
~ x - barrie

[David Scott]

Thank you kindly. You have a generous spirit carried by your comments.

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome...and I thank you for your kind compliments...
very sweet of you to say so.
wishing you well...
~ x - barrie

[Ruth]

Sigh...love has to be the most poignant maker or breaker in life and such a visceral lesson to accept...

[David Scott]

Thank you Poppy. I am not sure what I need to learn here? Just getting some feelings in black and white. :)

[pb]

memories..always are stuck in our head..something that we can't ignore is the pain we felt once upon a time.. that was a great poem..well done!

[David Scott]

Yes... I can't seem to forget the bliss... so the pain of the memory is deeper still.
Thank you for the comment.

[Rachael Lea]

From the first line to the last this poem brings reminiscence and longing such a sadness and yet you can feel the happy memories, very well done!

[David Scott]

Yes. Exactly! The cocktail of emotions I felt serve up this poetic libation. I think you are the only one to see the happiness here.
Thank you very much.

[Hyacinth]

4 verses, 9 lines, 57 words but over a million thoughts and feelings. THis one really spoke to me... I have tears in my eyes.
I think that you're getting a fan.

[David Scott]

You are very kind. I always welcome new friends when they are interested in sharing reviews and exchanging well intended thoughts.
Thank you once again.

[Lydia Shutter]

The children of divorce.....when their parents are no longer a couple, dreams are crushed and they grow up all too quickly. Such an emotive write, David. Good one. Lydi**

[David Scott]

Thank you for the comment Lydi. You are ever welcomed here.

[emmajoy]

Eight lines of pain and.. stinging tears.

Time isn't the inevitable healer it's made out to be. Tears actually muddy the memories, dreams fade, so many emotions fidget the mind, Add them together with this and that, tis hard to feel safe any more.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the expressive review.

[Alisa Js]

Very nice couplets, full of pain and memories😓😘😘

[David Scott]

Thank you for stopping by Alisa. Hope you are having a beautiful island winter.

[Alisa Js]

🌄🌅🌅 you are very welcome, and I am. Same to you in your part of the world🎄🎉

[Junction]

We must reach in and deal with the emotions that surface. Love is painful, but it is worth it.....

[David Scott]

Thank you for the thoughtful words.