Misery Felt Lonely

sitting beside this lake I feel a peace

as it seems like a place I belong,

the quiet waters cooling invisible radiance

into a mist of morning’s considerations

 

mystical sounds trapped in the confines

of the mind’s shoreline

bounce upon surface tensions,

these creatures unknown, rising

to devour the biting insects of emotions

 

the face of the dammed

leaking tears,

useless to release the heaviness

pent up behind speckled grey eyes

 

and I understand this body of water

knowing why misery arrested life’s river

as comfort goes numb

sitting too long…  

 

giving misery the comfort she craves

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

That is quite good. Being one with the nature is a very good way to console yourself. All your troubles, worries, stress go away once you try to live the nature. The descriptions are quite nice and so is your comparison of life to a river- a river goes on and life goes on. Well-written. Keep writing.

[David Scott]

Thank you kindly for your comment. I am on a bit of a hiatus. ha.

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"comfort goes numb sitting to long...giving misery the comfort she craves"...yes. "The face of the dammed leaking tears useless to release the heaviness pent up behind speckled grey eyes" The whole thing is a drowning I can deeply relate to...

[David Scott]

Thank you Lynn. I was not sure if I should use damned or dammed... Both seem to work. Yet here the truth is the soul is not really damned, it just feels like it. So, I chose dammed. Ha. Funny how much one word can change the meaning and intention.
Has to see your comment. I never feel lonely with friends like you.

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Indeed, you are not damned :)...but, you are dammed and silently leaking

[sheandherself]

I understood this well. Stunning reflection of a feeling.

[David Scott]

It is what it is... ha. Yes, we share so many feelings with our fellow travelers and somehow we still think we are alone at times.
Thank you for the comment

[Lyn Anderson]

The poem is very effective at capturing that elusive quality of serene water, with a lovely little tie down at the end.

[David Scott]

Thank you for reading KL.
Good to see your review.

[Ruth]

Water has a special energy and I believe the sensitive bond well with such...a lake or river ebbs in time with our thoughts...this is beautiful...gave me a pause...

[David Scott]

I am glad we share this in common.
Thank you again for spending some time on my pages.

[katja]

i was expecting something rather bleak; instead i find myself treated herein to the juxtaposition of mood [&] scene ... the evolution of that feeling, the claustrophobia that seems to set in around your concluding lines...
... all in all, beautifull 'rote, striking imagery, a stellar write & a pleasure to read
~ katja

[David Scott]

Thank you for reading Katja. I tend to seldom go "bleak" without offering the yin to the yang...
I am happy to have been, at the least, unpredictable. :)

[ms. barrie]

i agree: this is indeed a very poignant, soft mystical write...amazing dictation and use
of imagery. love the way your words paints a portrait of misery akin to the lady of the lake
(at least that's how i've read this.) either way, a very brilliant write that is relateable
thank you for sharing...i'll be sure to visit your ink again soon...happy writings :)
~ xo - barrie

[David Scott]

Thank you for stopping by.
I'm happy the write feels relatable. This is often the meaning behind my poetry; trying to relate...

[softlyfall]

I see misery. She wears a diaphanous midnight dress that swirls around her as she wades into to water. She has a pale tragic face that disappears under its surface. After the body stops struggling, drowning produces the bliss of release.
We all drown things.
We shouldn't but we do.
Very poignant poem.

[David Scott]

I have to smile at your response... So far, you are the only one who went to the dark side of this write. Honestly, I was very much speaking to the pain, (physical and emotional), we/I stuff so deep it seems lost...
Thank you for the graphic response! A little spooky. ;)

[softlyfall]

That is exactly what I WAS speaking of, how very literal you are! I am the kind of woman who wakes up happy and grateful, not seeking woe in the shadows...but when I see shadows, they inspire me too.

[David Scott]

I did not take you literally... But you did give me an idea for a great short story... ;)

[softlyfall]

Oh goody, I can't wait to read it. I have a delicious Annabel Lee anticipation now.

[A hare off]

Nature can be beautiful, a serene setting to explore and understand but it's beauty can also bring about those memories of who we may have shared these vistas with in the past, allowing sadness to overtake the joy we should be feeling. Really good David.

[David Scott]

You always add a great thought to your reviews. Thank you for taking the time and energy to share as well as review.

[Rachael Lea]

This paints a really beautiful and sad image. I love how you combine the outside with the inside. Everybody has their peaceful place where they go to think and I am sure with everybody's peaceful place you can find descriptions that could describe their inner turmoil or sadness. Good write thank you for sharing.

[David Scott]

Thank you for the thoughtful comment Rachael.