one missing compass point

In memory of the wonderful man I had the great pleasure to call my grandfather.

the point is gone

so are you

so here i stand

wishing it weren't true

 

you were the one to guid me

and after all these years

you're no longer here

and so flow the tears

 

you were my north

strong and proud

and now that's gone

you fought so loud

 

to hasten death

but he still came

and life as i knew it

will never be the same

 

you were my north

but now i'm left with one

missing compass point

now that you're gone

 

Author's Note

say what you want but please respect that this is about a family member so show some respect. No insults or I will have to find you and seriously harm you.

Reviews

[Allison]

This is good. Couple of minor spelling errors, but besides that, this is super awesome.

[Daydreamer54]

Wat a great metaphoric poem! it's kinda sad though and i'm sorry 4 ur lost. :( but I'm sure u r strong enough to find ur way.

[Katie L]

great tribute, well written

[R. Nella]

Very nicely written, a great tribute.

I like the ABCB format, which remains consistent up until the end, because 'gone' and 'one' don't rhyme, at least not with my accent. But at the end it doesn't really matter, as it's there to deliver meaning. I hope you shared this with your family as well as us.

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

I feel the same about my grandfather. You have expressed your sense of loss very well here. Beautifully written.

~True

[azlamalo]

you were the one to guid me--its missing an e by the guide...and i love your last stanza...

[Wicahpi]

a nice tribute to your grand-father. congrats.
(guid) should be (guide).

[WriterSki7]

5 stanza's, ABCB poem. Nice flow, good rhyme. A very standard kind of poem in referance to the organization; but the comparison between soul and compass is wholly unique. Alas, that we must learn to navigate our lives without the wisdom of our ancestors to guide us. Good job*

[That One Guy]

Amazing poem.

[DarkLovingRaven]

This is really good. I can totally feel the connection here. Bravo.