untitled

just a poem

You think you've got me?

But it's not that simple, you see

I'm not a piece of property

I only belong to me

You don't get to own this

Or know my bliss

Or steal a single kiss

You took your shot, but it was a miss

 

Author's Note

just something short and sweet off the top of my head..

Reviews

[Doreen]

Short and sweet and very much to the point.

[Fantasia Allmighty]

I love how it short and smiple and straight to the point. That's really good dupree....oh and message me every now and then.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Like the shortness and to the point..Sunflower

[Celeste]

How about the title "Forever Not Yours" - It may be short, but biting and concise. Good job!

[DarkLovingRaven]

Very short... I like it! I can see the control you have in here. You are all control in this poem and the rhyming makes it all the better! Keep it going girl!

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

I'm wondering why it remained untitled....

Also how anyone could be so confident and yet so wrong. To feel they had "you" when no one can really be had, when they hadn't even had a single kiss....

At any rate the poem is great!

[Coyote Poetry]

We can be gotten only if two decide it would be alright. A very interesting poem. Very strong and to the point. A very good poem.
Coyote

[Eric Cox]

This is a cool poem. Nice pen on this.

[James Watts]

Lol. Sounds like someone made a mistake is making attempts at amending it.

[Dwayne]

I like the way this poem begins. You are who you are. You are not defined by the life you build around someone else. However, I really do not like the connotation of "taking a shot", to me it implies that a guy performs an act and if it meet a certain level of achievement, then she is his. First, that clashes with the beginning thought of your poem. If his "shot" had been better would you now be his property? Second, the way to establish a good relationship with another person is to come to a MUTUAL interest in each other because of shared interests. I don't mean to be too critical of your poem Dupree, it's just that you start off as an independent person, then you use a phrase that completely contradicts that image. I hope that wasn't your intention. It also happens to be a concept that is repugnant to me and is the cause of many a woman's problems. Not that I don't understand that certain women feel that way. I certainly would not discourage those women from expressing them selves in writing. However unlikely it is that they would find time to write, they'll be busy with their owners demands. Overall a good poem, keep writing.