Here We Lay

When the ice melts the sun shall rise

And drown the day with it's lies

The moon shines after the fire dies

 Here we lay through these our days

Wasting the night's shade and the sun's rays

But here we will sit till the end of our days

 

Author's Note

Just something small. Not my best, definitely not my worst, but not my best

Reviews

[robing123456]

sad but true

[InHell4Ever]

hmmm?

[yossarian]

Very impressive in the compact way it expresses the the hopelessness that comes from life's deceits and too many broken dreams. A lot of power in a small package. Also, like the rhyme in triplet form.

[wijdan]

hmmm its good ....

[Gomer LePoet]

The sun shines every time you smile, and the rain falls as your tears do
Ms. Dupree.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the flow and the description in the poem. It was a short poem. I like the honest thoughts in the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote