Of She and Sky

Traditional..sure I can do that

The light upon her face reflects

A curve, kissed beauty glistens here

An eye, of heaven without peer

In heart, a praise to genuflect

 

In soul, a man is weak to thee

In mind, a lift of calming breeze

A glance, a tender grin to please

To touch the skin that He conceived

 

In death, welcome the depth of fire

The bed, invites eternal rest

My love, a shroud to wrap my view

 

In dark, my headstone kisses sky

The bell, a ring she waves a crest

She licks the final breath I drew

 

Reviews

[steph]

This is awsome, Its almost like a song that stays with you... I love it. I love the content. and The writting style really gips you

[MuSe Ampoule]

E.H.? Is that you? Have the aliens taken over again?

This was amazing! Leave it to OT to figure out exactly what form it was...being of free-form myself...I couldn't have even guessed..I just thought it was lovely!! And you did it all without the form or rhyme scheme constricting...I'm envious. Great job, though you're amazing so what else would we expect?

[?]

wow, this is deep. I have read this a few times now and each time I come away with a different meaning. There is so much here, and yes it is totally different form for you. But is very well done. Like it alot. Look forward to reading more of your work.

[roarke]

So beneath the ugliness, there's a beauty glistening. There's a depth here, you can read and touch this poem many times and never empty it's meaning. E.H. you handle all the big stuff here. It's vast, intimately spoken, but vast. It fills one with thoughts they didn't know they needed to think.

[Brad]

who the hell are you? hahahahah...this is a bit different from you...i hate rhyming for myself...sound to "country" when i do...but you've done a bang up job here

[Kerry O'Connor]

Whoah!!!! Seriously impressed - Petrarchan sonnet to a lady love from EH Monroe. Your muse was surely inspirational...
The octave is filled with beauty and serenity and then the turn... the change of mood exquisitely handled and subtle change to imagery of sombre death.
A tour de force. Bravo.

[OT]

woahh out come the highlighters!!! well now you know I'd love it!! love the rhyme scheme! technical prowess indeed here! and is that a cheeky iambic tetrameter I see!! I think so!! haha nice!!! I didn't even notice that it was Petrarchan!! so even more kudos for that and for Kerry spotting it! ha

[InkSlinger]

Good to see you stretch out of your comfort zone.. I like this, like Bette said it has an old world feel to it. Real solid throughout. Well done.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is very different from you normal style but the imagery is stunning with a subtly dark tone. So is the grim reaper a woman? Sounds like it to me. The flow is very smooth.

[Bette]

different for you, but well done i love the tone and old world feel.