Rough Beginnings

How I met my best friend...

Her dad left when she was small
And her mom remarried to alcohol.

Labeled as a “troubled” child
Her mom considered her too wild.

She called her a mistake
And showered her with hate.

Sadden, her wrist no stranger to pain
A release she found by cutting a vein.

Her “guardian” continued sowing words of hate
And the young girl soon began doubting her faith.

Feeling numb, cold and alone
She ran away in search of a new home.

In downtown Dallas, she found a community center,
A place she considered using as a shelter.

She began her life with a rough beginning
And was searching for life with a meaning.

She ran into a guy who was volunteering that day,
Their eyes met and by her side he would  stay.

Reviews

[Gandré]

This the kind of poem, which is being strongest in its beginning, "Her dad left when she was small
And her mom remarried to alcohol.

Labeled as a “troubled” child
Her mom considered her too wild.

She called her a mistake
And showered her with hate."----gives a huge impact while reading, I really liked this.

I thought, why this is so touchy, because it can be...... anybody.. we all have small tiny lives full of "s**t" ...... I really loved this, the fact that the poem would end so positively, made me feel well. I like outlooks. Great job!!

[James Johnson]

this is touching :) great poem

[qaralynn]

beautiful poem..love it

[Doreen]

You portray the feelings of sadness and pain very well in this. And though the pace is off at times, it didn't take away from this piece for me. A very nice write.

[Daydreamer54]

wow! I love it! I also like the rhyme scheme! :)

[John Harden]

Theres more to this story but thats another poem.

[Kt]

This is beautiful. I especially like the line, "And her mom remarried to alcohol." It's a good story, well written. Very well done.