Dream

covered eyes deception

your subtle scent renewed

the life I had envisioned

involved someone like you

if I could create a flower

and paint a peaceful hue

I'd owe the world a masterpiece

with the subtle scent of you.

I absorb your silence

and I know I misconstrue 

if I were to gift the world

it'd be the beauty which is you.   

Author's Note

SO not how I am used to writing.

Reviews

[KWP]

not being a romantic AT ALL I have to say well done ... usually I cringe when I read the romance but with your words I smiled a big smile at the lovely depth I felt in a love conveyed ... I hope your muse knows these words :) xx

[Ed Fagan]

Oh, lord this one absolutely embarrasses me. I would rather write crazed filled rants about religious misinterpretations and dire warnings than love poems. I do thank you for reading this though ... I feel a little better that you enjoyed this. :)

[KWP]

haha - you sound like me - and yes exactly!!! haha don't be embarrassed I did love it really ... YES x

[Ed Fagan]

Beautiful, and how she inspired you.
It brings the best poetry out of a romantic writer.
I think she's watching ;)

E.L.

[Ed Fagan]

thank you friend ... I am not sure about being a romantic writer but I will smile regardless.

I'm not sure either, but what till now I've read from you, is romanitc, and with that i mean not the hearts and the ahhh factor :) but deeper into sentiments. Great job. And I will read more of you soon!

[Marie]

But it's rather nice anyway. To gift the world with a masterpiece of beauty...you did it with yur poem.

[Ed Fagan]

I appreciate the compliment. This site has helped me change the way I see writing.

[Anu Biswas]

BEAUTIFUL! Just beautiful. You captured the pain so amazingly. Perfect words, subtle, deep, meaningful...this is the kind of poetry that moves me. Keep more coming please!

[Ed Fagan]

Thank you I am glad you liked it.

[Enid Blake]

Lol, good to step out of the comfort zone every now and then! You have the metre spot on in that first verse ;)

[Ed Fagan]

thank you. I just started reading about Meter. Only I hadn't applied it to this writing ... or so I thought.

[Emma Pond]

This was incredible. Oh my god, wow.

[Ed Fagan]

I am glad you liked it ... thank you.

[Emma Pond]

no problem, it was really beautiful and I liked your rhyming scheme

[KAOlmsted]

(I wonder if you mean "scent" in stead of"sent"?)

This is so beautiful; if you're not used to writing like this, it doesn't show. Really lovely, Ed...thank you so much for sharing this and stepping out of your comfort zone to do so.

-kimmer

[Ed Fagan]

I revised it ... thank you. so far outside the comfort zone ... feels good, it could have been chilly.