just for you

a peom I wrote for my friend, so mabey he'll understand what I'm trying to say...

I dress in black
just for you
I put on make up
just for you
I sit with a bunch of people
just for you
I cry
just for you
and then I look at you
I see your cold hard face
I told you to stop
I told you not to
did you listen?
no
now you lie here
in a coffin
dead and gone
you started smoking
snorting glue
and drinking beer
you were so young
barely teens
but you didn't listen
now your gone
look at what you did to me
I hope your happy
because I'm not
but still
i miss you
just the same

Author's Note

ignore any grammer problames I had and just tell me how you think it was

Reviews

[Jessica]

I understand. Have you shown this to him yet? He should feel lucky to have a friend like you.

I liked your really short lines. For some reason it really seemed to hammer your point in. Grammar, well I know you said to ignore. But, actually, in this grammar doesn't really matter. Not to me anyways. Whatever grammatical "mistakes" there are, I think add to your overall meaning here. "You're" hurt...possibly even scribbling this out as fast as your fingers will move.

Summary: I like it. Gold star for you. Welcome to the site... I look forward to reading more from you.