I think a number of us can empathize with this one, Jack. Life is full of uncertainty, and I like to be optimistic but it even gets me down sometimes. Even when I want to give up, though, I don't accept that alternative. You've penned the emotions so well as usual.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you for reviewing me as always i appreciate your words everytime.
This is a well written poem that I can definitely relate to. I often feel fearful about the uncertainties that I face in my life. However, this poem seems incomplete. Perhaps, you should try adding a couple more lines.
I really like how this poem flows. It's a very relatable poem. My only little suggestion is to edit the last stanza so that you don't repeat "for me". Fantastic job overall.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you I'll try to find some replacement lines for it and see what works. Thanks for the review
I think a number of us can empathize with this one, Jack. Life is full of uncertainty, and I like to be optimistic but it even gets me down sometimes. Even when I want to give up, though, I don't accept that alternative. You've penned the emotions so well as usual.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you for reviewing me as always i appreciate your words everytime.
Sometimes the world is a damn heavy place to breathe in but what's the alternative, giving up and re-learning next time around, gotta hang in there and bite the bullet at times, I totally empathise...poignant piece...
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