Blue Eyes

Blue was the color of desire to me

Likewise blue eyes meant serene

Until I met you

Evil that lives within you

Execrable is how you treat us

Your motives are clearly seen

Everything you do marked by jealously

Suffering soul that you are to me 

Reviews

[Whiskurz]

You do these acrostics very well my friend....Enjoyed....Whisk

[EileenMarie]

I can't rhyme but I can do these :) thanks for the review :)

[Abba]

Simple but compact with powerful words....like it!!!!

[EileenMarie]

Thank you!

[Jetta Zippora]

Very beautiful. Simple and serene, yet also complex and captivating. Brilliant, friend.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you very much!

[Speak in Silence]

I love this type of poetry. Good luck :)

[EileenMarie]

Thanks!

[Speak in Silence]

You're welcome :)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Great job! I really like the way you wrote the unexpected, and the poem came through with a blade and with indignation but did not put the reader off.

I agree with Emily Paige's review that making the beginning letters in blue makes them stand out and emphasize the poems theme. Aren't reviews awesome? :)

Write on, friend, I am lovin your growth!

[EileenMarie]

*big smile* that means SO much to me........ I am really enjoying getting feed back...... it makes me keep on writing that is for sure!! Thanks again!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Good!

[Mockingbird]

great acrostic. full of emotion and animosity.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you!

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

I see the myth of seeing blue flames as flame of evilness is surely in it...nice poem and a great piece to read!

[EileenMarie]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it :)

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

always a pleasure

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This is so amazing and beautiful.
I love it!
100/100

[EileenMarie]

Thank you for reviewing!!

[The dark story]

this is a very good piece of writing.........and enthralling to read.many people consider "Black" as something evil and as a bad omen........but you wrote in this poem(referring the purity of blue being ruined by that evil one).really touched me..great work!!:)

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! It felt so good to write this piece :)