Time

I thought of a moment,

Without any time,

If you put it in a box,

Locked,

And threw it away,

Where would all time go?

 

Would it follow a path?

Without any purpose,

Or would it try to escape,

The box,

Would it get out?

Or stay there forever,

 

Would forever, ever come,

How would we know?

If you took time away,

Gone,

Without any time,

What would life be like?

 

People deserve more time,

Time doesn’t deserve us,

Would we ever,

Die,

Life without time,

Would be the death of us.

Author's Note

I don't know if I like this or not...
opinions welcome!

Reviews

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I like it, it is profound. So many of us think we have time and we don't.

[oh,hey.]

I agree with you, we cant control time, time controls us

[OBWhiteHawk]

I agree with this completely. I have felt the same way about time. And I love how you summed it all up at the end.

[oh,hey.]

Thankyou

[Terohime]

This work of yours was great. I enjoyed the unique way you write. Keep up the good work.
~ your friend Res

[oh,hey.]

thanyou res!

[oh,hey.]

thankyou*

[Terohime]

anytime ^^

[Basu Gupta]

amazing piece.....nyc wrkkkk

[oh,hey.]

thankyou!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

A moving piece, time is precious. but we really don't know what will be our world wihout time. A thought provoking piece worth for the reads.

Thanks for sharing.

[oh,hey.]

Thanks, I wasn't sure because normally I don't write non-rhyming poetry. Glad you liked it!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yeah it is cool :)