Forever and More

Hello you,
I admire you for
Taking my smallest breath away.

Let the world
Sweep us away.
To our secret somewhere.

Kiss me when it rains.
Know me when I am silent.
Keep me always.

Be my prince
And I'll be your sacred princess.
Running away, shutting out rules.

Let us be.
Forever
And more.

Reviews

[Pixals]

Reminds me of my relationship. Cute poem :)

[Guilt]

Your choice of words and structure give the voice a very unique pace of peaceful calm. A relaxant. Phrases like "smallest breath" create moments where I had to hold my own breath. Don't ask me how, it just does haha. And that is what I personally love to read. Awesome airy write!

- Guilt

[Abhra]

I really like you style. You have a very delicate yet profound voice. You create spaces with words. The abruptness is so lucid. Your poem flows beautifully. Splendid work.

[NA]

beautifully done...enjoyed :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

And I'll be your sacred princess.
Running away, shutting out rules. -- These lines say the most to me. The idea of becoming the princess and "running away" gives me the feeling that this is perhaps an ill-fated affair. Also "shutting out rules"; a powerful image and metaphor.

Overall, this piece was simple, concise and very strong in its conceptual direction. Well done.

[EMMIE]

This is so romantic and sweet and the flow is so easy. Beautiful!

[Grant P.]

Nice poem, it feels like a great poem for a wedding vow. Something of true love. Great write keep it up.