Inhale, Exhale

Inhale.
Don't forget that
I love you.

Exhale.
Speak to me
Through glass.

Inhale.
Become an addict
Of the air I breathe.

Exhale.
See the world
Through my eyes.

Inhale.
Forget your life.
Fall right into mine.

Exhale.
Don't assume that
I love you.

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

I felt as if I was watching an art film , frames being dragged too fast. loved it.

[Blacksheepfiction]

Beautiful and strong. Great job, Keep it up

[MoriartyMesa]

I will say, very Roman http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X83IYWmcEFg

[Antoñyo]

Wow..It always amazes me to see a short, concise piece pull off such power, and this one is done so cleverly!
Great work with this,
Thanks for sharing

[Poetic Beauty]

This is almost like a conversation between two poem. It was interesting to see the different perspectives.

[Ladd]

Well that seemed rather dark. I like it. I can see someone getting stabbed in the back as that last line is said.

[Sarah Marie]

Wow! This is short but so powerful! I love the two lines under each "Inhale" and "Exhale." Each tells a different story which adds to the creativity behind this piece.

[Luke L]

Good job, bud :) Nice stuff

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The first and last line clarify this verse...the usage of the inhale&exhale...can be done a bit more to give this the effectiveness...you want in the lines...just in my opinion...

[Jake Dyson]

It's different I cant really explain it but its good, keep it up.