Shattered

Oh, don't leave me alone
Tonight.
I cannot even seem to
Hold my pen right.
The page remains a blank.
Something is surely wrong.

I cannot catch any
Sleep as my
Emotions need release.
I let to,
Without a net to fall in.
Without a simple care
In the world.

With no you,
My world seems to strip itself.
All life, meanings and hope.
Gone.
Everything seems to turn out
Wrong.

I am far from
Okay.
I am nothing,
But shattered.

Reviews

[Twizzler]

WOW...I know the feeling and its awful. The hopelessness that overwhelms you, kicking you while you're already down.... but somehow the best writing comes from that misery. Great job, I liked this a lot!

[Dreamer]

This is an amazing poem, full of emotions.
I have also felt "shattered"...
beautiful poem...
I enjoyed it thoroughly.

[Aaron the Baron]

this is great. The pacing really captures the theme of your thoughts and feelings. And standing vigilant behind the words is lonliness.

[Misery]

You are shattered...
and each little fragment is a poem. I want to read all the scattered pieces of you, Emily.

[00000000000000000000000..]

We all been like glass at one time, looking at pieces like crystal glim off the sea in a sunny day, Just drifting lifeless to no lands inn, Where left within that boat with no way to paddle shore, Its time to see again, Its time to flee from what is & move to higher standards, How do you move? You move with your heart not your mind, you need arms or legs to move, all you need is heart to drive you away from the un wanted affects of life where broken sets as a wall.

[WizardsAffliction]

The phrase "I let to" is confusing. I don't know what's going on or what it's connected to. Also, again with the one-word lines, but I'll digress on that point since it was already discussed on another one of your poems. Maybe "I let to" is a typo? Or am I overlooking some sort of detail in that particular stanza?

Aside from these minor issues, this is well-written and promising. Good job! :D

[Pryde Foltz]

To love someone who will not let you ... You words speak to me, here.