Zombie

Good evening folks,
This is me.
A mere zombie.

I am awake from the dead.
The grave is my charming bed.
Beneath the dirt, I rest my head.

Man, I feel dead.
Damn, am I repeating what I've said?
Perhaps back to bed
Is where I should head.

Sorry folks,
But I must go.
Will I sleep?
No one knows.

Reviews

[Kenaz]

I see zombies every day. I like that you have given the reader a chance to interpret the poem differently. On Halloween it is a zombie poem, on any other day it is a metaphor.

[ms. barrie]

Very unique, dark, yet whimsical imagery your words captured in this piece, Sveltana!

The rhyming scheme and fluidity is amazing, not to mention holds the reader's
Attention through out. Thanks for sharing! :)

[Child of God]

I loved it! :) this is pure awesomeness! lol

[Rachel Landes]

Cool concept and delivery, I like your flow and vibe.

[icelandicblue]

Some days it's hard to know if we are just existing as the undead or if we are actually living our lives. I like that this poem has a clear literal and also a metaphorical context that allows the reader to ponder your words.

[WizardsAffliction]

I like how the pace changes throughout the poem, well done.

And the various ways you utilized the words "dead", "head", and "bed" (though "bed" had a similar meaning both times) was a nice touch, but the repetition is unnecessary, such as here: "I am awake from the dead" and here: "Man, I feel dead." The reader already knows you're dead (metaphorically speaking). If you want to emphasize the point, maybe try thinking outside the box when it comes to the idea of being a zombie, or get inside the head of one, centralizing the thought process on what YOU feel/felt at the/that current moment.

Otherwise, keep at it! :)

Hope this helps and happy trails!

[Pryde Foltz]

Nice one........................