Sand Feelings

I can't bother sleeping
When all I crave
Is to bury your face deep
Into the course, dry sand.
To hold you under.
Make you suffocate.
I will show you how you
Made me feel after so long.
With all the disappointments and pain
You put me through.
The heartache was not repairable.
I will show you how I feel
And shall gladly demonstrate with the beach.
Say a prayer
Before the sand pebbles welcome you.

Reviews

[Bluefire]

.. This made me picture a couple just broken up, they went to the beach late at night to talk and apologize but the other wasn't forgiving. He/she surprised the other and shoved the face into the sand until death took over.
Satisfaction swept over the one left, along with guilt and fear of being caught...
And then I thought of Gaara from Naruto xD
Well done. This made me shiverrr!

[Aaron the Baron]

I have been avoiding reviewing this one for a few days because truthfully, it scares me. It scares me that the feelings of hate and love are so polar opposite of each other, yet right next to each other. I feel that you cannot truly love someone without producing some sort of hate for them, just as you cannot hope to hate someone with all of your being without loving them as well. The feelings are both so equally strong. Totally different but their dna is the same. And I love this poem because to me it displays how love can easily become hate. The stronger the love, the equally stronger the hate and the hurt. Thank you for this one.

[Rayree Parker]

dam girl thats pretty much spot on how i was feeling about the love of my life x- no less than uummmm all day ... un-repairable heartache god i no it o to well right now i have had heart breaks aches and wounds b-4 but this one im afraid has changed my heart and soul forever ?? i would take someone grinding my face in course sand suffocating me any day over heartache i would let some one kick me in the teeth right now if i knew it would ease a broken heart physical pain is cupcakes compared to heart break and disappointment from someone who has ur heart and love ... so choking someone out in the sand really wont make them realize how bad they hurt you is what i think ?? but i am wrong alot it seems lol hang in there girl keep sharing ur truths with us they are always appreciated in my world :)