I Don't Want to Be

I don't want to be
The demon lurking in the shadows.

I don't want to be
The one who doesn't care.

I don't want to be
The window that's never opened.

I don't want to be
The girl with the locked up heart.

I don't want to be
The one left behind.

I don't want to be
Myself anymore.

Reviews

[Hannah Ellsworth]

I love the images you show here... great use of repetition as well. Love it! :)

[whitemagic19]

I love this. I do know what it feels to be in the same position and wanting to feel the demons go away and not wanting to be certain things. but this is amazing! good job :)

[VertoAtrum]

We all have days where we'd rather be someone else. Just to get away for a bit from the problems, worries, and everything.
Sad, but also defiant.

[shawnt5604]

Sad but strangely beautiful. Very nice write! I loved the ending.

[ms. barrie]

Amazing write, in its honesty, very profound write, very relatable...
I think most ppl have sunk into the depths of despair of wishing
They were someone else, didn't have lingering doubts of choices
They've made in the past, and insecurities.

Very well crafted poem...And pleasing meter. This very much
Resonated with me...Thank you for sharing! :))

[Konigin]

Wow. This is deep. I can relate because I have been here myself before. :) Wonderfully penned Svetlana! :)

[I Am Svetlana]

Thanks for reviewing and I'm glad you are able to relate. I wrote this when I woke up and plus, my mom and I really haven't been getting along these past couple days.

[Konigin]

You're welcome. Yeah... I could feel the emotional turmoil here.

[Inda]

I think this is a feeling we all endure at one point or another in our lives, you've captured it perfectly and as always i love your use of language- raw and honest.