Vase For Living

He finally
found his way back.
He took a chance
to lay a kiss
upon her waiting lips.
Holding long untouched fingers
to heal a heavy heart.
He gathered the
remains of their destruction,
hoping to transform
themselves back to the beginning,
He now held the promise
of a destination,
burning the shattered
and the fractured
mind she owned.
He made her laugh
more than cry.
Gave the kisses
which stole her breath.
Left her with a
shaking skin from passion.
He created her
a vase for living.

Reviews

[kitty blur]

This is just... incredible. I'll start with that. I could feel this almost holy sense of starting over and forming or repairing a new relationship with someone covered in the debris of past experiences. This poem made me feel safe. I know that your poem is written in third person, but I still connected with the 'her' in this. The visual I get from the poem as a whole is like, me sitting on top of a stool while someone swirls silk around me until I'm full of light again. I don't know what else to say or how to explain it. It just feels nice.

As far as the writing of this goes, I really like your style here. I actually like the punctuation that you included in the poem The periods at the end of each little thought made me pause a little longer to absorb each image. My favorite line was the last one, hands-down. It was a clean conclusion to a beautiful piece of work.

You've included so much work on your profile so far - I'll definitely be looking at more of your poems. Clicked on this one first because the title of it stood out to me, glad that I did that.

[I Am Svetlana]

Wow...such a stunning & unexpected review, I greatly appreciate it! I understand I have a lot of writing on my profile, but some poems I've written are better than others. I'm glowing inside just knowing how beautiful you thought this was & how you could feel you could relate to it. I try my best to be as honest as I can in my writing & tie in some way for emotions to connect with readers. Thank you so, so much for this review! It really brightened my entire week!