Lust

She had the perfect smile

Perfect style.

 

The perfect eyes

Beyond devious lies.

 

The best of the best

She had it all.

 

Don’t go weak when you

See her from a distance.

There she is.

Go take her.

 

But she won't go easily.

 

Soon, night will fall and

She will bolt into the darkness and shadows.

 

For then, your task is to seek her out.

Find her in the pitch black.

 

You will find her from the

Sparkles she's left behind in her invisible trail.

 

To you,

She is the world.

 

To her,

You are nothing, but a speck in the nightshade.

 

 

Author's Note

Not sure if I should add more. Need advice and opinions.

Reviews

[Matthew Smith]

With the first two bits, I was instantly reminded of Little Red Riding Hood. It one were so inclined, it could be expanded out to be more reminiscent of that (but obviously not the same idea, theme, message--or anything). Just an idea.

Good stuff. A lot of room to expand.

[A Lost Man Found]

swear to god, you wrote this about my ex girlfriend.

[Robin]

if I was to title this I call it 'Lust' , you shine an interesting light on the gloss of superficiality .