Blleed Me a Rose

Don't tell me you've bled a rose
When you've never shed a petal.
Be as powerful as you can
And you still won't win.

Bleed a rose and its thorns
Then you'll be where I am.
Only then
Will you understand.

Expose yourself, be vulnerable
Then you will begin to peel petals.

Shed your petals.
Become stronger.
Grow armor, tough skin.

Shed me a rose and thorns
And I will show you the way out.
The light at the end
Of the darkest tunnel.

Bleed me a rose
And I will show you life.

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

I find the theme of this poem exceptional. Since in reality shedding ones pretenses and false persona enables an emergence of the actual individual. So the allegory is accurate and invigorating.

To me, "Grow armor, tough skin" is slightly incongruous. Possibly some facet of roses would serve to depict the idea, hence keeping with the theme.

Omitted in my estimation is any reference to the intrinsic qualities of a rose (beauty, quality, velvet, emotionality, et al)

Creatively however, this is one of the best of the many I have read in this venue for originality of concept. Your idea presentation is strong and continuity is excellent to the end.

I enjoy the message this poem conveys.

[Kes]

Cool. I really like this.
I hate it when people think they've given their all, when really they have no idea.
Oh well,
Great poem. :)

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

your writing has the feel of song lyrics ..very interesting concept ..I like the idea someone who gives so little who thinks they gave it all..

[Joiedevivre]

Great write this one. I like the pace, the images and the intention of this poem!

[MoonTig3r]

just beautiful. i love it

[Vanny]

So very powerful, I really loved this. Very well written. Nicely done. -S.