Subtle Direction

This about a secret crush. This is probably different from other love poems you've read.

Blissfully I enjoy the space of my mind

Roaming my consciousness secretly 

Allowing things to come and go as they please

Confident in their steadfast privacy

I sigh with a bittersweet content

Holding onto hopes that are hard to hold

Bitter to let go

 

My heart remains detached from faith

Fear of pain and rejection overwhelms my conscience

Peace has betrayed me to remain with you

Teasing me with every thought only to leave when fantasies fade

Offering itself as a tool for guidance

Subtely leading me where I must go

 

Author's Note

This is my first poem in almost a week, honest reviews on what you liked and didn't like.

Reviews

[Jessica M.]

"bittersweet content"
That metaphor... damn.. that's good.
I would never have thought to describe it as that, but it's a perfect fit.
I love it. Fabulous job.

[Dani California]

"Peace has betrayed me to remain with you". Great line!

I really enjoyed this piece. Strong emotions and I love the insight into the mind... spirit. Well done :)

[Guardian]

I liked the feel and the mood of the piece. It was structured well and had a nice flow and structure to it that kept me reading. Great job!

[Mortricia]

"Peace has betrayed me to remain with you"

I enjoyed this poem, partially because I have a bit of a crush myself at the moment. I particularly liked the line above because I think it's interesting how you gave peace a human sort of ability.