now we walk

it seems those walls keep tumbling down

Now we walk.

                   Out into the dark night.

Moon hidden
by the growth of trees.

                   I feel you there.

Your power.

Your eyes gleaming bright.

         I feel you breathing.

 

Closer.

                    Closer.

Every moment I feel you closer.

Knowing

 

          I will be a feast

                     for your hungry hands

ravaged by you
                    

                     moved by the night

           trembling

with the want of such a thing

your heat
           surrounds me

in ways I never felt

                           before

I melt and am reborn

on my knees

Author's Note

it wanted to stretch and reach

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is different for you, which I quite liked. I felt the longing and the tentative craving that began as a ripple and ended as a wave. I can relate to this...just the pure expanse of abandon that at times seems so absolutely attractive.

Technically: I'm wondering at the many different single lines. I felt a little as though I was jumping from line to line instead of flowing. Just my personal opinion, though.

Overall, a sensual, beautiful piece.

[Emily B]

thanks, at one time it was all left justified, still trying to decide what it wants to be when it grows up

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Oh, I like the right and left formatting, just the separate lines made it a little choppy. Was thinking more of a "short stanzas" feel...I don't know. Then again, I'm not some stylistic genius, so allow it to grow on its own, you will make the right choices!

[Angelic Darkness]

This is sensual indeed. This line is my favorite: your heat
surrounds me
in ways I never felt
before
I melt and am reborn
on my knees

AD

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Well done! It's not easy to say much in little space with few words, but you did it.

Sal

[justjenn_2u]

So descriptive, I felt I was there while reading!

There is a warmth in this poem and a yearn to know what the closure will be.

Nice write!

[poddar kushal]

Melt and reborn! This is passionate yet in a way discreet to the extent of shyness. I just salute to your power to write.

[The Rock And Roll Vampi..]

I don't get it.

[melanie j bean]

very nice!

[Donald Meikle]

It seems you have plucked a lot of heartstrings with this, (mine included) As to decadence, well long live decadence. I yet quiver

[*** Hey Jude***]

You have brilliantly combined images that create a collage of loving words, showing the passion and strength of true lovers. Beautiful energy expressed! Enjoy keeping the love alive ~ Jude xo :-)

[Antony]

And a beautiful walk you have taken us on, absolutely magnificent, there is much longing in your words. At first I felt a fear within your first few lines, then they build on, to end in a sensual delight, feeling the softness of your emotions, just wonderful Emily.
Antony

[Jonhoi Vaughn]

Reborn huh?:-) Your walk is spontaneous. Each experience in our life brings us closer to what we are to be. Still, I hope you never stop "walking". I enjoy a poem that probes imagination. Thanks for the "walk". Reborn...... funny. But damn good!