everything

There came a day,

when he demanded

my everything

and I gave it-grudging.

 

Solomon-Wise he took

my Pandora's box secrets

and left the lid intact.

 

When I learn to love him better

I will no longer fear the giving--

wisdom will reign.

Reviews

[Jasmine]

I like this poem a lot, and yet, I cannot tell if it's ironic or sincere. Solomon is portrayed as a good man in the bible, and yet perhaps everything is not as it seems here. The lid is intact, but is the box?

Nonetheless, a well-constructed poem - often the shorter ones speak volumes more than the long.

[Nothing Personal]

As if nothing happened when everything did. the interesting word was grudging..that hold the key to this one..Quite the poem !!

[Una Xoto]

oh that's lovely. it is a tiny h-bomb... small but powerful. That vulnerability & trust which comes with love...
f*****g spot on!

[Wondering Mind]

A magician too!! Very clever write.

[Ladysue]

oh this is intriguing..he demanded everything, you gave it so not readily and yet the lid remained intact...this is cleverly done...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

this one leaves me pondering. He demanded everything and you gave it all and he was wise enough to leave it all hidden. A wonderful write

[arbitrary jane]

that's a good man.
the words here are packed. grudging, demanded, solomon-wise, the box... intact... they all carry so much weight. so many connotative meanings.
great work in every way.

[.]

Brevity is the soul of wit:)...a powerful write indeed.

[Lilly Negoi]

what, not even hope?!
this is indeed a huge poem...