bereft

my beggared heart

     wandered

               naked roads

impoverished

     of moon shine

deprived

     of sun's gift

bereaved

          of Muse

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It wouldn't have been so bad if you'd not been impoverished of moonshine. I could stand a swig myself. hahaha You know I'm just ribbing ya? I like this except it's sad. Give that bereaved Muse a drink...You know the Bible says "Give strong drink to him who is about to perish and wine to those who are of heavy hearts"...there's a verse that doesn't get read much on Sunday from the pulpit!

[Lydia Blackwell]

YES!

[Christie Moses]

oh its such a talent writing such strong emotion into a short few lines. This is so moody brilliant. I really felt the poignancy of it.

[E.H. Monroe]

The shorter ones are tougher to chew. I still say Haikus and pieces that you need to say somthing within a tighter limit are balls nasty.
3 ways the character is poor, the first two are hard, the last one is like the loss of soul.

Now My morning is ruined...ina good way

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A playful and exact piece, full of hope and study, almost lesson worthy, very good read, great job.

[zig]

"impoverished of moon shine"

i like the play of words there, like the drunkeness i feel when inspiration hits and ideas seem to flow from some other source. well said emily.

zig

[W.k.kortas]

Short, sharp, tight. No waste, no fuss, all good.

[Tommy]

Moon shine inspiration is stagering, but this piece stands tall...

Great Write Emily!
RLG,
Tommy

[Ed Hart]

this is a pure state, lovely

[Poeticadia]

Yes, i think sun and moon (light and dark) are the driving forces behind all of my poems too... (one of those essential life concepts - there has to be either light or dark at any time -that features far too prominently in everything i write!) A perceptive and neatly aposite poem. I love it!

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

To be pained by such an existance yet remain calm and philosophical is truly a sign of strength.